Stick User
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12th Nov 2017, 11:12 PM
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This page took a while, and I'm not real happy with it. I'll get better at combat scenes eventually!
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13th Nov 2017, 12:52 AM
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They didn't specify, but they don't usually use a points system.
13th Nov 2017, 2:18 AM
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Tia should have stuck to brawling, she's not a very good stick user.
Still, I bet she gets to play with all the sticks. :D
Next page, Tia is worried about the dress ?
Still, I bet she gets to play with all the sticks. :D
Next page, Tia is worried about the dress ?
13th Nov 2017, 3:06 AM
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I've really enjoyed reading all three of your comics/graphic novels and I particularly love the color work in this one. I was wondering though, if, instead of a solid black edge and a solid brown tint to illustrate the arc of the wooden bokken, you would overlay a transparency gradient from 100% at the top of the arc through to 0% at the blade. Would this improve your satisfaction with the page?
13th Nov 2017, 3:37 AM
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No, that's a relatively small detail. There's a lot of stuff I don't like about this page.
13th Nov 2017, 3:26 PM
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I'm so glad you aren't a perfectionist! Even if you aren't 100% happy with the page, you are willing to share it (I hope knowing that we will love it regardless of what you don't like). I struggle to share what I do (mostly writing) because I want it to be perfect, which is unreasonable if I want to make any progress.
13th Nov 2017, 9:34 PM
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You're too hard on yourself! It looks great!
I love how she somehow got the idea preserving the bokken was the goal! "I have no idea what I'm doing, but I'm great at it!"
I love how she somehow got the idea preserving the bokken was the goal! "I have no idea what I'm doing, but I'm great at it!"
14th Nov 2017, 12:42 AM
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Love the eye/lip color.
The page looks great overall.
Don't love the last panel. I get (I think) that you are trying to show extremely fast movement, but the solid coloring of the entire "swish" is kinda 'meh" to me.
Thanks again for your awesome work!
The page looks great overall.
Don't love the last panel. I get (I think) that you are trying to show extremely fast movement, but the solid coloring of the entire "swish" is kinda 'meh" to me.
Thanks again for your awesome work!
14th Nov 2017, 3:29 AM
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I'm definitely enjoying the comic so far. I check back here far too often for the next page (not that I want you to rush the pages, I just want to see the next page as soon as I can :P) and given my new dedication to swimming I'm gonna go back and re-read Scrub Diving!
14th Nov 2017, 3:56 AM
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I'm glad you like it! It'll still be a day or two before the next page is ready, unfortunately.
14th Nov 2017, 5:12 AM
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That's okay. I just finished re-reading Scrub Diving. I need to find an Alis. ;)