Dragons and Silk

High fantasy with some naked folk.
Barrier
Barrier
16th Jul 2019, 1:20 AM in Spirit
Average Rating: 5 (5 votes)
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... Not at all sure about this page. It seemed better in my head. Ah well, it happens.
User comments:
Lyon
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Lyon
The whole page made me lol xD 10/10
Guest (Guest)
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Those eyes are brighter than I previously thought. Seems like they would shine through their eyelids at night.
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It's very dark in here. They're ember-bright.
StLOrca
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StLOrca
I love this page. Get down Guin!
NoOne3 (Guest)
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Sooo... She basically made them into burrito? It's a bit confusing.
Sheela
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Sheela
Pretty much, yeah.
Venne flips their bed, turning them into a sexy burrito as you call it. Meanwhile Tia grabs the screen and plops it on top of them. Guinevere doesn't seem to mind - Maybe the sneaky, hiding thief is a bit of an exhibitionist ?
Lee M
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Lee M
Most of this page is pitch black on my monitor (and I thought it was properly calibrated). Had to download and lighten the image to properly make out (npi?) what was going on.
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That was intentional, but clearly it didn't work for everyone.
ShoShone
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ShoShone
@view


Tia elbows the divider panel and knocks it over. Hence, Venne gets mad at Guin and wraps her in a blanket. Not mad at Tia. Well, not sure there. ... What did happen there?


Oh, so ... Do Venne and Tia not fuck or what?
Andrew_C
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Andrew_C
I can see what's going on but it is on the dark side, to dark to be immediately legible, unfortunately.

Getting a good looking night scene is a compromise between reality, what what feels realistic and what's readable. I assume it's so dark because the lantern is out. Perhaps you could justify a similar night scene being lighter by assuming & showing there is moonlight coming in a crack between the curtains?

To those who have difficulty seeing it. Venne burrito's them and then Tia drops the screen over them

EDIT: Maybe lampshade it with silly sound affects? "Ka-Burrito!" "Ka-Screen Drop!" IMO it would work better than explanatory dialogue, and it is a comic situation after all.
Lee M
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Lee M
Maybe the silly sound effects would work - if view was Dan Shive...
Cuddle Lion
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Cuddle Lion
Look out you goons, herer comes Rip Haywire!
KA-CROSSOVER!
Andrew_C
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Andrew_C
That made me laugh. I don't think his giggling fists would get him far here.
eire1274
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eire1274
The coloration in the dark was INCREDIBLE! WELL DONE!
TeeKay
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TeeKay
It's strange to me seeing all those comments. I had zero trouble reading the action here. Yes it's dark, but the important parts are the things that are visible (and "audible"), and they do describe the events clearly enough.